1.  What diction choices suggest that this poem does not have a serious tone?  How would you categorize the diction?  How does this reflect how Betjeman targets his audience?

The diction choice suggested in this poem that gives away that it is not a serious tone, is when the speaker sends a prayer to God, asking for personal issues to be fixated. The diction of the poem would be categorized as comical and or sarcastic. Throughout the joke the speaker, didn't seem as serious to be asking of a favor from God as your general follower or believer of his gossip. For example in the poem when the speaker referred to him being a sinner, and he'll be returning back to evening service if he has the time. This is an example of sarcasm because he's not actually sincere about the proposal he is making but instead, stating anything that he believes sounds right for the moment.

2. Comment on Betjeman's use of a woman speaker as a rhetorical device
Betjeman using a woman speaker helped create a emotional connection to there audience. The speaker of the seem to be very selfish and sarcastic about numerous,  topics mentioned into the poem, and incorporating a woman would take away from that and he could be view as a protector and less self absorbed .

3. What is the most rhetorically effective argument Hardin has against helping those in need? What makes it effective?


4. Hardin relies mainly on the logic of his arguments, but he also uses strong connotative language.  How do expressions such as "toothless tiger" (¶3), "conscience-stricken people" (¶9), and "spread of cancer" (¶31) affect the reader?  

I believe the effect of these two statements mentioned in the question above, will have the readers view it a a negative condentation. A reader might view this statements to be rude, and harsh.

Historical Writing Analysis

      Wollstonecraft is a famous women's right advocate who throughout her life has been on the side of equality for the human race. This is the same type of stance that other writers like Voltaire, Busbecq, and Howard Zinn each in his own respective lifestyles and belief take. The similarity in their diction all lead to the fact that each dislikes an unbalance inpower, rights and social status, and would seek to remedy each situation in their society with morals, and ethics. However the tone in each of their essays and their specific view of the opposition lead readers to believe that essays, nevertheless their styles of writing are nowhere near the same realm of thought and conclusions. Mary Wollstonecraft's work bears resemblance to those of Voltaire, Busbecq, and Howard Zinn in terms of the position that they are campaigning and/or arguing for. Their goals are similar as they seek the rights for "lesser" of two categorized factions, as the various writers recognized oppression and/or unfairness in each of their respective societies. The difference between Wollstonecraft's writing and the others are how she points out the wrong in her society and of what the degree she presents it to be.

     Each writer has done his or her part in naming the victim and show how they have been victimized. This leads to different tones in their essays as the level of severity differs between each writer. For Centuries women have not been given their full rights. They have been stripped away from numerous opportunities which lacked the chance of them displaying their full potential as independent individuals. Examples of such leisures are; education, and roles in political affairs, which would enhance their knowledge, and make them qualified to become divine as man. In addition they have been made slaves of their own husband, there main roles were stay at home moms, which included cleaning, providing meals for the family, a nurturing mother, and a loving wife to their husbands. According to the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft women are degraded and are used as sexual objects rather than human beings. Consequently they are traded and often sold to corrupted man. Indian women were taken captive by Spaniards, who then transported them to Europe to become servants and sex slaves. Although in Voltaire’s essay requests to have respect for each other and love one another because God has demanded so. Man, however look at the bible as another reason for condemning women. The Genesis book for example depicts Women as weak individuals with no comprehension. That is a prime example why women were considered to be viewed by man as incompetent individuals who were inadequate to run any country or state. In comparison to the three other essays the authors mentions the topic of religious tolerance. For instance Busbecq says that you need to let others have complete freedom to practice any religion in which the chose without dictating the religion you wish for them to convert to. Voltaire claims that if an individual does not have a religion you should assume that they would be necessarily condemned to hell or to exile them. Wollstonecraft's essay and the other essays provided both talk about equality but they both have their different stances on what should be equal. One says that "just give us the same rights as men" and the other says "let anyone do anything they want and they should not be restricted."

   The writer's position in their essays are critical to the overall message because some as Wollstonecraft not only advocates for the less fortunate in her eyes( which are women) but she is in a place to give personal experience and is able to bring her feelings into it as she is part of the victimized. ForMary Wollstonecraft she is blunt with who she views as the eiron. It only seems sugar coated because she views two parties as the eiron. She views both men and women as the eiron or villain. She sees men as an eiron, because they form a barrier between women and recognition and logic. They stand between the women by using things like "place" and "roles" to define women and place them in society. Mary views women as eirons, because they allow the men to do such things. Women too often allow their emotions to play the main part in their actions and this prevents them from seeing the logic that sits on the other side of the barrier that is man. The other three writers in contrast tend to not place blame directly. They state reasons for situations; however, they do not directly place blame. Instead they work their way around placing blame while shining light on the party they hold responsible or as the villain. This allows for manipulation where Mary Wollstonecraft places direct blame and cannot say anything to the contrary because placing direct blame is almost like setting something in stone. You cannot take back what was said and it becomes very hard to change meaning or impact because of the fact that it was blunt. Whereas, those that circle placing blame have room to shift and affect the impact or change it entirely. They also have the opportunity to not retract their statements but to manipulate the impact by manipulating the message because room was left for manipulation.

      What one finds to be moral might not be viewed the same way by others; for each of us have different perspective on world and the people. "Every individual is in this respect a world in itself." Mary Wollstonecraft implies that there is not another individual that we care about but ourselves. We strive to improve our own life, taking everything that is in our path and because of these need we do not pay attention to those who are prominent in our lives. Columbus for example became greedy, that passion for gold and the title by which he would be remembered made him heedless to the suffering that he was causing among the Indian tribes in the Bahamas Island. What it seems to him natural, we find it to be monstrousness and selfish. Who was he to condemned Indians to an unwanted life, a life in which they were treated as nothing but slaves? Man see women as property, sex slaves denouncing them as threat to society, and a distraction to man preventing the industrialization of their cities and states. "Are we not all the children of one father and creatures of the same God? (Voltaire)" Should not women be considering as fellow sisters, shouldn’t they have the same authority in the world as do man? We are of course created by one being, and yes, we have represented that being in many ways: to Christians he is Jehovah; to Jews he is known as Yahweh. With all those names that we have given to our creator, our belief on one God has brought us all together. Mary Wollstonecraft is careless of morality, to her been reason is far most imperative and it’s logic which makes on valuable.

   Wollstonecraft, Voltaire, Busbecq, and Zinn writings all are successful in demonstrating to the reader that they believe the unfairness and mistreatment of others is wrong and all write in great detail about what inequality does in all aspects. (Religion, Sexism, and some forms of Tyranny.) While these texts have similar structures in writing (i.e. main idea, example, reasoning) you can tell that each has his or her own reasons for writing which results in different word choices, clauses, and rhetorical devices in order to influence the reader, mainly because each writer has a different audience that he or she is addressing. Wollstonecraft being an advocate of women's rights spends a lot of the time criticizing men and victimizing women which leads to different tones and word choice in her essay as opposed to someone like Voltaire who is talking to the clergy, the church and all the religious tyrants of his time. Even though the goal is the same they are writing for different reasons which may or may not influence their credibility/morality. Howeverthat depends on who the reader is.

Fast or Slow

The case of life in itself must be taken slow. A fast life might be more efficient, but a slow life provides better quality by allowing individuals to absorb all experiences, whether joyful or tragic, along with patience permitting better opportunities to experience within life, and your mind is not bombarded with an overwhelming amount of material by taking things slow and making the best of what one’s existence has to offer. A fast life does not allow you to embrace the experiences which take place day-to-day. As Thoreau said, "Why should we live with such hurry and waste of life? We are determined to be starved before we are hungry.” These words by philosopher, Henry David Thoreau, imply that people rush through life trying to accomplish our goals, without thinking twice about it. When in the process of trying to succeed, we fail to learn any lesson from rushing. A slow paced life style hands several opportunities to individuals, and enables the mind to soak in whatever it pleases.

​Not all experiences we encounter will put a smile on one’s face, but traumatizing moments may create the opposite effect. Although there are distinct rough patches, they make us who we are and what we will become, shaping us into the person we aspire to be, and creating the meaning of life. According to an anonymous writer “Living slowly ultimately means living deeply”, which can interpreted as, a slow lifestyle makes one more aware of their surroundings. The slower life is taken, the more individuals will be able to take in everything life throws at them. For instance, a sponge’s purpose in its existence is to soak up all liquids, and remove rough stains from surfaces. This is comparable to the human life, where we are made to walk through several trials in life, whether good or bad, and let them sink in. The tougher areas we face must be eliminated through acceptance, but soon washed away in search of a new challenge. People may ask why someone would want to encounter all the imperfections of this life; well the simple answer is growth. Without making any mistakes and learning from them, we simply go through time not knowing the difference between happiness and misfortune. The troubles faced within a person’s lifetime make them who they are, along with their past mistakes.A slow life truly helps all individuals cope with the dreadful moments encountered daily. For example, the lost of a loved one would have a much larger effect on a person that is rapidly moving through life than it would on one who is going at a slow pace, due to the loss of time spent with the deceased. All the memories that have been shared would be easily forgotten, so they are left with more grieving then they are reminiscing. Onthe other hand, an individual who spent more time with their loved one will remember all the good and the bad things and would enjoy every reflected moment. When considering the true meaning behind the word “life,” it is truly the art of learning, and when educating oneself, retaining all knowledge is the key to success. Living amongst others is a battle, and the competition is fierce.

​In the case of life in the realm of competition, one would assume that being swift in all things guarantees success.  We submit to you, however, to consider that there are far more opportunities in taking your time, reflecting, and observing the world around us in order to attain your goals.  Take for example the classic fable of the Tortoise and the Hare, which gave the common and cliché phrase, "Slow and steady wins the race."  We ask that you do not look at the act of being slow or sluggish, as those are negative connotations, but instead look at the opportunities that are presented to us individuals and have a sense of patience.  When things are done with haste you tend to finish first; you are not necessarily left with victory. In other realms of competition, like the workforce, leaving you with wasted opportunities that could possibly increase the quality of your work, or check for mistakes in what you have already provided.  Notice that not all papers you submit to teachers or professors can be taken back once submitted.  This of course would be something to consider to anyone wanting success in education or the workforce in general.  In the place of other forms of competition in the sports industry, merchandise, and direct competition in general, brings us back to the old fable of the Tortoise and the Hare.  Again it is not the act of slowness that gave the tortoise victory but the vices and negative attributes with being fast or speedy, cockiness, unwillingness to consider other things, and even laziness due to his extended nap during the race.  It can also be told from other versions of this fable that the slow tortoise had plans and tactics which lead him to victory while the narrow-minded hare thought raw speed was a better strategy.  All of the examples give the same message, not necessarily that slow and steady wins the race, but careful thinking, patience and planning guarantees you success.

​Living slowly is one venturing through life, and abiding by the occurring events. An individual who attempts to journey through life at a slow pace focuses on one detail at a time, and typically proceeds from there. People don't often place themselves in overwhelming situations they can't necessarily handle. Adding extra stress and hardships to one’s life makes a more chaotic approach on living a carefree and stressful lifestyle. Such as the times of adolescences that are disrupted by the rigorous academic courses expected from school, students are incapable of actually enjoying and maintaining the essential years of being a teenager. With the intensive workload given, they are both trapped with multiple tasks to handle, and drowned in a pool of stress; separating skills that must be retained over time by instructing at a slower speed makes for, not only a limited amount of anxiety, but a better understanding of material. There several benefits to life in general, but they differ between the person’s interests. For example, many people find love to be one perk. When in a relationship it is better to take things slow so the partner will not be overwhelmed by sudden showers of affection, oppose to moving fast where things fall apart quicker. In order to be content, you must be free. Free from troubled thoughts, and free from the pressures that are faced daily.

​A slow life makes for a better life, because being able to absorb all events that occur within one’s lifetime, being able to see what is ahead before taking chances, and keeping the mind at a state of tranquility, enables the mind to experience the benefits of life. From all the examples we have shown, it is to be believed that in general terms slow is better than fast in most aspects of life and it differs in specific areas. Taking your time in life can have a plethora of benefits in the long run, than rushing through it hastily. It is to be believed that many would rather have a life that was lived to its fullest than one without substance. The state of slow has many positive connotations than negative ones and therefore can both be interpreted and used positively, as slow could be described as taking your time, having patience with someone or something, and getting all the details by using your senses more acutely. All these things could be associated with the word slow. Coincidentally these are also attributes that we believe someone should have, if not want to have, in order to live a happy or fulfilling life. This is not to say that being fast does not have its place in the world. There are times in which one must accomplish tasks with haste in order to achieve his or her goals and receive opportunities, but how would one know to move with a certain pace if they never took the time to discover why they must do so? The question can be changed from "What is better fast or slow?" to “What gives a better chance at succeeding in life?”, and “What would make me happier in the long run?” As writer Bonnie Mohn once stated “Life is not a race-but indeed a journey,” meaning that taking time in one’s existence is essential, therefore making it an experience of a lifetime.  There is no telling where life may lead anybody, because life just isn’t that simple. Life is harsh sometimes, that is by no means a reason for trying to escape it, for one is stronger by just going day-by-day at a slow pace. Living life means taking the time to appreciate every flaw that it has, it is growing with it and admiring its beauty. By moving at a faster pace there are no mistakes to learn from, beauty or growth detected, there is only a finish line. Moving rapidly does not carry memories, for they are all forgotten because the mind was not strong enough to hold on to them. The slow life is a Pandora’s Box of memories that are to be treasured when the last breath comes. It is at the death bed when one realizes whether they had lived or not. If one is to look back and see nothing but clouds then what life have they lived, but if one is to look and see the sun or rainbow over the sky after a storm then they have truly lived life. For life is standing strong through the storms to see the beautiful rainbow over the sky. We submit to you that going at a slow pace through life does not only make one stronger, but gives one a chance in discovering the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow.

Time

Time-the system of those sequential relations that any event has to any other, as past, present, or future; indefinite and continuous duration regarded as that in which events succeed one another. Can it be said that this is the true definition of time? Is it possible that there is an altogether different definition if not more than one definition of the word and concept of time? Time is a fascinating and confusing thing. It is both a mystery and an already defined concept that could be argued to be our creation in the first place. Time can be taken metaphorically, and literally, with perception and point of view playing a big contributing factor to the definition being used in a specific context. It is not easy but we can craft a definition by showing how time is not only defined in different ways but different attributes contribute to the definition of time. Using things like the concept of Thoreau defining time and how that defies our creation of the clock, and our silly belief of overcoming fatalism, and how time is keen to the philosophy of presentism all contribute to our understanding of time, leading to the creation of our definition of time.

A clock is an instrument utilized for the sole purpose of displaying and measuring time. Time is an essential factor in each individual's life. It typically evolves around every decision, and move we make. An average individual would consider a clock to be the general representation of time. According to the well known philosopher Henry David Thoreau, he considers time to be a continuously straight line of occurring events. Time is ultimately everlasting, and constantly changing. Thoreau believed that the concept of time couldn't be measured or placed in the representation of a clock. For example a clock can suddenly stop working, and breaks. Due to it breaking it doesn't time will remain ongoing, and not miss a beat. Thoreau looks beyond the man made fate of humanity. Time is seen as another restriction on the sights of man, it is something that we can live without. That clock that people rely on is only an instrument. Thoreau sees the idea of ''time'' as something that ruins his ideals of simplicity and he believes that time isn't something that people should hold too heavily because it restrains man in thoughts. Thoreau wants to see mankind living freely, not thinking too much on what the future holds. He wants them to live naturally, without the constant restrictions that instruments like ''time'' that infringe on a personal freedom that humanity can no longer remember. Thoreau obviously defies the clock with his philosophy because time stands as a symbol of reliance to him in a way. Imagine if we never saw another clock again. That might seem like chaos to most people, but to Thoreau this is what freedom really is and how the world should be. The clock only provides security or organization to the minds of people who know nothing else. Simplicity and organization can't truly coexist because of their contradicting principles in everyday life. Thoreau's principles all derive from the need to make life simpler and more relevant to nature. The clock is a manifestation of time; both the notion of time and the clock are arbitrary in a sense. Therefore they are unnecessary to human interest, which makes time against the philosophy of simplicity Thoreau had proposed.

Thoreau's analysis of time defies our ridiculous belief that we are capable of escaping extinction, that we are capable of overcoming fatalism. Thoreau’s view on time is that we should live in the moment and let what is to happen to us just happen. In this day and age people are trying to escape fate. For example, on April 22, 2013 there has been an application process opened for people to live on mars. There have been over 200,000 people who applied for this Mars One mission road map, where those who take this trip will never come back to earth. With all of the problems that are going on in the earth today, such as global warming, natural disasters, and problems between the nations, time is running out for this world to end.  These people taking this trip are trying to escape the fate of the end of the world. These people are trying to give themselves more time. By doing this it goes completely against Thoreau’s views on time. The people taking this trip is not living in the moment they are not letting fate take its place. They are trying to overcome fate.  There is nobody on earth that could run away from fate. There is nobody on earth that can overcome fate. Time is not something you could run away from. Time and fate are one in the same. Time will forever be ticking. Nobody could ever cheat fate, and this is why Thoreau’s analysis of time defies our ridiculous belief that we are capable of escaping extinction.

Time is not a concept that defines past recollections or a futuristic being. For decade men have referred to memories in order to access their being as they die. Time is continuous and only the objects that are found in the present exist. This philosophy of time is known as Presentism- an idea in which nothing else matters but the present state of time. A person at the death bed may be reminiscing but what they say or do at that moment matters more like: apologizing or sending regards are just a few things that someone may do and will remain with those who are there to witness the event. Memories are blurry thoughts that try to hang on to our mind due to our incapacity of turning back time to relive those events. It is impossible to live in the past and the future, there is no existing being that takes a life in those dimensions of time. We need to learn to live in the moment, for it is not an occasion that we can live again. Time is not a cycle which can be repeated over and over, there is no way to speed it up or turn it back the only thing to do is to go along with it.

Using things like the concept of Thoreau defining time and how that defies our creation of the clock, and our silly belief of overcoming fatalism, and how time is keen to the philosophy of presentism all contribute to our understanding of time, leading tothe creation of our definition of time. Thoreau possess’ an interesting point of view when it comes to his analysis of time. His analysis possess’ many oxymoron in the way that he views time as both limitless " the stream I fish in" and fleeting "I want to live… and suck out all the marrow life can offer", life is both precious " and discovered that I had not lived" and frivolous " I came to die...". His philosophical views tend to contradict most common thought. He views time as valuable and a commodity. This contradicts our thinking and definition of time being a metaphorical and physical concept. His definition is more from a philosophical stand point, and ours tends to veer towards the literal and physical, or the metaphorical and the force behind that. Even though they all differ from one another, they can all be considered definitions of time depending on the context you are approaching it from. Time an invisible being, which evolves the earth dragging it along with it. For years it has been known to be a cycle that never ends or changes. The great philosopher Henry David Thoreau once said: “It matters not what the clocks say,” we have created the clock to be a representation of time with the same twelve numbers that continue to repeat themselves. When we look at the clock we see limitations, preventing us from doing that many things that we want to do and that we are capable of doing. We fear that the time given is not enough, so we give up on work and dreams and we hold on to nothing but memories and wishes. Time my friends is endless, so why represent it with a timer that impedes us from continuing to live every moment as new day. Why keep fighting fate, when no force is strong enough to fight it. We cannot define time, but can learn to go along with it.

Morgan Burton                                                                                 October 20, 2013

 Why are so many of the words abstract?  How do words like freedom, poverty, devotion, loyalty, and sacrifice set the tone of the speech?

These words help set the tone of the speech because it draws the audience in and makes them want to continue to listen to the presenter. The words listed above all  were major problems society were facing at the time. As President John F. Kennedy mentioned these words throughout his speech, it gave the audience a chance of hope. President John F.Kennedy wanted to let citizens know that eventually in time a change will occur and justice will prevail. 

 Find examples of formal rhetorical tropes such as metaphor and personification 

Metaphor- "and let every other power know that this hemisphere intends to remain the master of its own house."
Metaphor- "To our sister republics south of our border, we offer a special pledge: to convert our good words into good deeds in a new alliance for progress, to assist free men and free governments in casting off  the chains of poverty."
Personification- "this hemisphere intends to remain the mast of his home"

 Does Kennedy use any figures of speech that might be considered clichés ? 

President John F. Kennedy used mutilple  cliches phrases throughout his speech. During the duration of his speech he talked about a change happening in a America, freedom for the men, and uniting together to create a new world and law. These were considered clichés because these examples provided were commonly typical for a president to say to attract the audiences attention. These pointers were incidents that America were having difficulties facing, and the fact that President Kennedy mentioned it in his speak made the audience want to continue to listen and support the matter.

  Do any of the words in the speech seem archaic, or old-fashioned?  If so, what are they?  What is their effect?

An archaic President Kennedy utilized in his speech that were somewhat old fashioned was the phrase " Now the trumpet summon us again not as a call to bear arms, though arms we need; not as a call to battle, though embattled we are—but a call to bear the burden of a long twilight struggle, year in and year out, "rejoicing in hope, patient in tribulation"—a struggle against the common enemies of man: tyranny, poverty, disease, and war itself. This is considered a archaic because many people no longer speak this way. This effected the speech because it made President Kennedy sound more educated, and sophisticated. The meaning and tone of the speech had a larger impact on society back then, because during that time period they were facing a tremendous about of hardships, and needed a sign of hope that a change was going to come.


5. The speech is a succession of twenty-eight short paragraphs.  Twelve paragraphs have only one sentence, eight have two, and six have three sentences.  Why do you think Kennedy used these short paragraphs?

I think President Kennedy used such short paragraphs because he had several points to make. He repetitively mentioned the same key point over again, but each time he provided different examples.

 The speech contains two extremes of sentence length, ranging from eighty words (¶4) to six words 

A high proportion of the sentences used in the speech are on the short side, because President Kennedy was very blunt and straight forward , with the topic he was referring to. He didn't have to provide a lot of details, on the topic. He was more descriptive with other topic, that needed a more descriptive tone.

 More than twenty sentences are complex sentences -- that is, sentences that contain a subordinate clause.  How do complex sentences suggest hidden energy?

Complex sentences hides energy by incorporating more facts about a certain topic or situation. The more you speak on a situation with facts and examples the less your personal feelings are displayed. 

Why is the dominance of declarative sentences, which make statements, appropriate in an inaugural address?

Declarative sentences are appropriate in an inaugural address because, it shows confidence in the speaker, or presenter and the topic in which they are discussing.  The speaker immediately grabs the audience's attention with its demanding tone and statements. Declarative sentences gives the speech, a more developed meaning, and message

Find examples of rhetorical schemes such as anaphora and zeugma

Anaphora- John F.Kennedy used this rhetorical device in paragraph 14, and other sentences when he repeated  the phrase "let us." He later uses the phrases "let us both" in paragraphs 15,16, and 17. Anaphora was lastly used towards the end of the speech when he uses the phrase "nor"


 

Homework For The Holiday

Morgan Burton September 07,2013

AP English Language 1B

Homework for the Holiday :

Vocabulary Diagnostic: On separate sheet of paper .

Blog Post :

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Strongest Essay :

In my opinion the strongest essay from the timed essay prompt on Brian Greene’s The Hidden Reality was student 76. They started their essay off with an introduction that was powerful and immediately stated three devices the author portrayed throughout his paper. during this student’s paper they constantly referred back to the text to support their argument , used descriptive details and kept there paragraphs organized.

Weakest Essay :

The weakest essay by far was student 7. Their essay was remarkably unorganized and didn’t follow the criteria asked of them in the directions. They had many grammatical errors that were difficult to comprehend. The prompt asked to convey different devices used in the introduction of The Hidden Reality but instead the student focused on the meaning of “the universe”

Strongest Introduction :

The strongest introduction was student 15. Their introduction was tastefully done, they started the essay off with a general question we all as individuals have thought of over time. Eventually he made a reference to Brian Greene’s book The Hidden Reality and how it covers all the questions we have and discusses these arguments by using the devices such as specific questioning, personification, and senses of imagery.

Best quote integration :

The best quote integration was student 18. Every idea the student mentioned in their essay he referred by to Brian Greene’s essay.

Essay with the best thorough analysis :

After reading all 76 of these students written essay, you start to repeatedly reread the same introductory paragraph , same exact quote and literary device examples. But not many essays sounded like they thoroughly understood what they read and the meaning of The Hidden Reality by Brian Greene, except for student 21. This essay was well written and organized. This student was able to read this text and interpret back into a descriptive and comprehensible essay. This student quoted the text, but summarize the meaning of the context in a descriptive manner that an individual that who hasn't read the text could get a clear understanding of what the text is about.

Three essays that misunderstood the prompt (personal influence)

The three essays that misunderstood the prompt was student 9,11, and 67. These essays didn’t completely follow all of the criteria asked of them in the prompt. In their essays they incorporated their own personal opinions and feelings about the topic into the essay. Essay 67 and 9 were fairly written paper but they made the mistake of including their opinion of the meaning of the universe into it.

Most academic vocabulary :

The essay with the most academic vocabulary was student 48. Throughout their essay they used many elaborate and descriptive words. There choice of words made their paper seem more organized and mature. Using such intellectual vocabulary word let the reader, know the author was a confident writer and could express him or herself properly.

Strongest clearest grammar :

The essay with the clearest grammar was student 76. In my opinion this  essay was also the strongest essay. This paper was accessible to read, comprehensible and systematized. There was choice of punctuation, and use of vocabulary played a key role in making their essay so successful.

Chronological order :

Student 26 had the best essay that portrayed chronological order. They mention every time the author introduced a new term , definition , or topic in the essay.

Analysis :

    In the essay The Singer Solution to World Poverty by Peter Singer, he introduces two hypothetical situations to the reader. The first dilemma started with Dora. She was in which a hard working woman who worked everyday to make ends meet by sitting at a the station writing letters for illiterate people. She was giving the opportunity of a lifetime to quickly make 1,000 dollars. Dora’s task was fairly simple. She had to convince a nine year old homeless boy to follow her to an address given to her. Dora succeeded with the plan , she received her reward and went to purchase a television. Time had passed and Dora was informed that the young boy she sold off to buy her new television set would mostly be killed and his organs sold for transplantation. The purpose of incorporating this example is so we can prevent such horrifying events from happening by simply sacrificing our material comfort, because it isn't merely valuable or important as the life of a child.

    The second hypothetical situation Peter Singer mentioned involved Bob. He invested his life savings into buying a Bugatti, which he hasn’t be able to insure. He always had the mentality that if the market continues to rise , he would to be able to sell the car and live a stable life after retirement. One day Bob takes his car out for a drive and parks the car on the side of the train tracks. In the distant Bob sees a young child playing on the railroad tracks in a path of a runaway train. Bob had the chance of saving the child's life and using a nearby switch to divert the train onto the sliding. But instead Bob chooses to let the child die and not sacrifice his precious car to get damaged. In the eyes of Peter Singer he believed Bob was at complete fault for the death of the young child. He could have prevented the child’s death by sacrificing his Bugatti. By choosing his car, over avoiding the death of someone else, you can conclude that materialistic things means everything to Bob. The message Singer is trying to portray by utilizing Bob not sacrificing his Bugatti for the life of a child is that we all have the opportunity of saving children s life. By donating approximately 200 dollars a month to organizations such as Unicef we could assist a young child dying from starvation.

    The audience could connect to this essay written by Peter Singer, because no individual likes to see a young innocent child suffer from situations they didn’t necessarily make happen or wish upon themselves ,which is extremely unfortunate. The author used the literary device of pathos in this passage to create a emotional response with the audience. The emotional sensitivity occurred with the starving children and both the children used in the examples died. The author wanted the reader to feel a sense of guilt for the death of the children and reevaluate our decisions of buying luxurious items instead of trying to make a change in a person’s life less fortunate. Logos was also applied into this essay. Singer used this device by influencing readers to act upon his argument. He uses logos to convince the audience that we use our income to pay for our necessities and splurge on luxury items and entertainment rather than choosing to help a needy child overseas. Singer mentions that there are hundreds of million of people that can financially afford to donate 200 dollars to aid overseas organizations, but are frankly not doing it. The last device Singer uses in his essay The Singer Solution to World Poverty is ethos. Ethos was the appeal to make a difference and end world poverty. He used statistics to demonstrate how simple it would be for each class to donate a certain amount of money.

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Morgan Burton September 20,2013

Title : I Know Why The Caged Bird Cannot Read

Speaker: Francine Prose, a well known author and visiting professor

Occasion: A critique

Audience: The audience for Francine Prose”s article “I Know Why The Caged Bird Cannot Read: How american high school students Learn to loathe literature,  is directed for both high school students and parents.

Purpose: The general purpose for writing this article was to inform readers that in current times high school students are not asked to read challenging and critical literature. Majority of the text giving due to the english curriculum is fairly simple and doesn’t have much value to it. High School students today are handed a piece of literature that no longer expands their capabilities , and vocabularies,  comprehension skills or deepens they feel or think, but instead are simple books they easily understand. Rather than constantly disturbing the same piece of literature that is not quite so simple, high schools need challenging ones.

Subject: The general topic of Francine Prose work is that high school teachers are simply placing pieces of literature into their curriculum that the students will find easy to read. They are more focused on the author's name rather than the content of the writing.

Tone: The tone of the essay is a informative.   

Title: Can Wikipedia Ever Make The Grade?

Speaker: Brock Read a journalist and editor for The Chronicle for Higher Education in Washington, DC.

Occasion: Journal entry

Audience:The audience is pertained to the general public. Anyone who has utilized Wikipedia to obtain research on a particular topic or subject.

Purpose: The purpose of the article was to inform people that Wikipedia is not exactly a credible or reliable source for research.  School wise Wikipedia is never an acceptable source to use for classes. Anyone is capable of editing the articles on Wikipedia and place misinformation. Though the false information can still be removed, it’s credibility remains questioned.

Subject: The general topic of Brock Read work is to question the validity of the popular website Wikipedia. Is the information they provide on their website accurate if, users are capable of adding information that is not necessarily true.

Tone: The tone of this journal entry is also imformative,